Creating the Voice Over...

We then begun discussing what should the voice over be and then begun script writing. We had to include aspects such as relevant information about the story, main characters and some of the themes which are in the film. Here is our first draft for the voiceover.

We read out our voiceover to a few people and asked them for feedback on it. As you can see from above they believed that the last sentence abruptly ends, and is not a powerful ending. They also thought that it was rather polite sounding which made it seem weak where it was meant to be strong and powerful. 

We made changes from our first draft and added a sentence in the end which we thought was quite dramatic and powerful. Which was liked however they still thought there were parts which could be cut out to make it more powerful and gritty rather than weak and polite. 

This is our final voiceover which our audience believed was the strongest. We made changes by cutting out parts of the voiceover which made it longer and by doing so made it weaker. Also in this draft we were told just to change words and it would be perfect.